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Illiteracy continues to be a concern for many countries in the world today. What are the causes of illiteracy in the modern world, and what effects does it have on the people concerned and on Society as a whole?

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Regardless of living in a modern world, several societies are still struggling with illiteracy. There
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 to be two main causes and some effects on
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countries
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This
 matter is mostly due to the economic turbulences, unemployment,
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 number of lowering income people.
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, the deprived people are not able to pay the high rate
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educational affairs. The
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 educational system in some less-affluent
countries
, mainly in some
countries
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 the governments allocate the main part of their budgets
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 the civil war. it seems that the administration cannot build schools
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 to their population.
Furthermore
, they are probably not able to afford the educational expenses like; books, educational aids and more importantly the skilled teachers.
As a result
, a lot of children are deprived
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 having education and remain illiterate. The effect of
this
 problem on society can be quite irreversible.
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poverty impacts
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all aspects of
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people’s life especially on
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 system. Since deprived people are struggling with their primary needs for life, they cannot meet the expense of their children’s training. So the children remain illiterate or less- literate. The illiteracy issue will be continued in the
next
 generation
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, less-literate or illiterate parents are not qualified to find an appropriate job. A
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 widely observed effect is on lack of sufficient educational structure in the civil war involvement
countries
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 and fundamental impact on the nation’s ability to improve. overall, poverty and long-term civil war seem to be the main causes of illiteracy in societies, and they affect considerably on nation’s fundamental education and improvement in all aspects.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Literacy
  • Illiteracy
  • Poverty
  • Access
  • Educational resources
  • Social inequality
  • Discrimination
  • Gender disparity
  • Racial bias
  • Cultural norms
  • Technological advances
  • Political instability
  • Disruption
  • Education systems
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Job prospects
  • Health implications
  • Self-esteem
  • Empowerment
  • Economic growth
  • Social cohesion
  • Civic participation
  • Democratic processes
  • Exclusion
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