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Some people think there should be free health care for all the people, but other disagree. Discuss both sides.

#people #health #care
Healthcare is an important
issues
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now-a-days
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nowadays
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.
Health
 is, directly or indirectly, related to productivity. Without
a
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good
health
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,health
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 a man can’t burgeon in his or her life. That’s why
its
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 reconned the most precious wealth of the planet earth. So, a person’s productivity is tantamount to a
countries
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country's
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 overall economic growth. That’s why governments of various
countries
 take lots of initiative to ameliorate the
health
care
system
 of the country and they put public
health
at
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the paramount.
Health
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care
of
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in
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 all
countries
are
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 not the same. Many
countries
 subsidies the
health
care
system
, others don’t.
This
 trend, subsidization of
health
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the health
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care
system
,
are
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 visible in most
of
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the developed country. But the 3rd world
countries
 are still left behind
on
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this
 race, as they don’t have that
much
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many
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 resources to spend money
developing
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on developing
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health
care
. Their per
caput
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capita
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 income
is
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is also not sufficed
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also
 not suffice which in long run
stem
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the
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from the
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 govt. spending. There are lots of schemes
on
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in
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health
care
 systems and
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maybe
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may be
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maybe
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 it is good for the economy
on
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in
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 the long term as it increases
the
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productivity. But there are some discrepancies between
two
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the two
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group
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groups
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about
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regarding
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the
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free
health
care
 for all the
people
. According to one group, it’s absolutely
a
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 best option for the country to make their
health
care
 free and at the same
time
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 it makes the
system
 easily accessible and open to all the
people
. No
people
 have to face any kind of discrimination regarding
health
care
. And overall, it begets
the
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 bonanza for the economy. But according to other
groups
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 it has many disadvantages too. Free
health
care
 to all would mean
people
belongs
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belonging
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 to any
class
 get the same facility and the upper
class
 who has the ability to buy medical
facility
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facilities
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 don’t need to pay any penny
on
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for
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this
 purpose. So,
government
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the government
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 should make a vivid policy based on the
class
. The policy
that
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gives the lower-
class
highest
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the highest
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 opportunity and the upper
class
 gets the lowest. In
this
 way, we can ensure
the
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equal opportunity
to
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for
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 our
people
 and brings
a
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phenomenal growth
for
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to
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 the economy.
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