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Describe s.o who is famous in your country Who the person is Why he/she is famous Why you admire this person What you would do if you met this person

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I would like to talk about my favourite renowned singer who is one of the most imperative
person
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people
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 I was inspired a lot in my life. Her name is Bich Phuong, she is not only
singer
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a singer
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 but
also
writer
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a writer
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. The primary reason why I admire her
because
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is because
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 of her confidence, she teaches me should believe
whatever
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in whatever
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 I make in the creative field.
Moreover
, she has a good sense of humour, she often
tell
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 clever jokes, but no less funny, and knows how to make her fans laugh. Evidently, I love all her songs, even unwell-known songs. If I have a chance to
met
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meet
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 Bich Phuong, I may kiss her and ask her
sign
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to sign
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name
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my name
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in
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on
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 my shirt. In conclusion, I have respected Bich Phuong too much. Even though
,
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 there are a couple of young generation singers more talented, I was still her loyal fan.
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