IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7

In today’s World of advance science and technology, Many people value artist. What can the art tell us about life that science cannot.

#today’s #world #advance #science #technology #people #value #artist #art #life
There are close to 8 billion
people
 in the world; Everyone has a different set of interests. In the modern era where technology is booming and advanced scientific research is being conducted still there is a large group of
people
 that gives more importance to the
art
. The importance of
art
 in comparison to
science
 will be elaborated
in
Change preposition
on in
show examples
 upcoming paragraphs and evolve conclusion from it.
To begin
 with, every human on the planet is highly dependent on the innovations of
science
 as well as technological enhancements. Infrastructure, modern facilitated laboratories, Industrial equipment, and advanced medicines everything is a boon to
science
. These innovations have not only helped to enhance comfort but
also
 boosted the economy of the country.
People
 are heavily dependent on
such
 development; Survival without technology is
next
 to impossible.
For example
, an Internet shutdown can cause a huge loss to a business. On the other side, scientific inventions can’t give you happiness.
Hence
 a lot of
people
 these days suffer from hypertension, depression, anxiety, or stress. And the number is going to rise exponentially in the near future. Here
art
 can play a major role and become a saviour.
Art
 allows a person to express their feelings in the form any form. It can be painting or music. To conclude,
art
 and
science
 are like a coin; both sides have their individuality and importance. If
art
 is life
then
science
 keeps moving the life. They both compliments each other and survival without any of them is
next
 to impossible. If we combine both of them, it can turn into a powerful reality.
Submitted by Krishna.gandhi on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: