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It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older people than that of young people in many countries in the future? Do you think it is a positive or negative development? And what will be the effects on society?

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The percentage between the young and older generations varies from one country to another. In some countries, it is expected that the
number
 of older
people
 will overcome the
number
 of young
people
.
This
 essay will discuss how
such
 development will have a negative impact on society and will list some of these impacts. Based on human nature, the older we get the weaker our body becomes.
Therefore
, most older humans will not be able to continue performing their normal job and will usually retire.
This
 will cause a huge
gap
 in different occupations. And since younger
people
 will still have to learn
first
 to be able to work, filling the
gap
 will require some time. The higher proportion of older
people
 will put a heavy burden on the government. With
thea
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the
 large
number
 of old
people
, more healthcare will be required. The government will
also
 need to provide
caring
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home
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 for the
eldeary
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elderly
, to provide
there
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necestices
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necessities
 when they can no longer take care of themselves. On another hand, with
less
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people
 being able to work, there will be a huge
gap
 in expertise across many
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fields
.
Altogh
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Although
 younger
people
 can learn, they cannot replace the life experience
those
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eldery
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elderly
 had. In conclusion, the huge
gap
 between older and younger
people
 will have many negative
impact
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society
viscosity
. I
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 the country should prepare for when that day comes, by planning for
better
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the better
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 health system to
accomidate
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accommodate
 the large
number
 of
people
.
In addition
, the government
shoud
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should
 put in place a process to ensure
people
 transfer their knowledge to the
younder
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younger
 generation before they retire.
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