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Child abuse on the internet has increased dramatically. What steps are available for individual and the govt to stop it? Present your problems to stop the child abuse.

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These days, we can see abused
children
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 on the
internet
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. nowadays we live in a specific time related to technology and robotics.
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, technology has some cons and pros. In my view, we would have some ways to control
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 problem in each society.
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 of all, advertisements can help
parents
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 know the truth of information on the
internet
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. In other cases, they should not be afraid of it due to there is not anything too scary for them.
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, advertisements on TV or social media could understand the fact of how to use the
internet
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 in the correct way.
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,
parents
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 will explain it to their
children
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 with simple words to understand easier without any confusion.
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,
children
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 at the age of 6 or 7 did not use the
internet
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, because at that age there are so young and while they will grow up, their
parents
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 can not control them without
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 technology.
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, a child-like to play games at the age of 7. It is a good way that maybe he is a talented child in gaming but you have to focus on them to manage his time.
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, at the school teachers should have the most advantages and ways of using the
internet
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 and mapping the social media without their
parents
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. Generally, these days, some could not manage their time to not abuse any
children
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. In my opinion, if we can do the 3 ways that I mentioned in the 3 previous paragraphs, we can control them.
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, we can decrease it in the near future.
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