Nowadays, celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the present days, the glamour and prosperity of renowned persons are more being recognised
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their achievements.
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phenomenon has sparked heated debate among individuals
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imitate their celebrities even without thinking
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it is appropriate for
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or not.
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my standpoint, I totally agree with
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talk about the film
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of the present day, they are not spreading any informative and productive information to their followers. To explain it, Youngsters nowadays
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precious time
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about
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life by surfing
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the internet, watching videos, and the movies of favourite
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today's
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most
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movies
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the movies
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are of offensive nature
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crime and robbery and watching that material, they only able to learn unlawful behaviour from them.
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, Young people imitate
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habits
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the habbits
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of personalities without even knowing their pros and cons.
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, they get misled and opt for
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awful
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unlawful towards society.
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, despite
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film
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, these days sports
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players
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more inclined towards prosperity rather than games and showing their talent, because they spend precious time signing up with advertisements companies and earning money.
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, it
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persuade
their followers in
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direction, they always have a thought that
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only minting money and enjoying their life.
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, youngsters would learn them, being international players is just earning money while playing.
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shows
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that 40
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per cent of sports
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drugs while taking part in international or national games.
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which
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they
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are misleading the individuals by persuading them in
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the wrong
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direction. To sum up,
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in
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famous personalities were known for their work, talent, and achievements in the different roles they played, in my opinion, nowadays a very few renowned persons are barely known for their accomplishments.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • glamour
  • wealth
  • achievements
  • portrayed
  • overshadow
  • influenced
  • lifestyles
  • unrealistic
  • expectations
  • values
  • promoting
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • inspire
  • positive impact
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