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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in household in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in household in one country between 1920 and 2019.
#show #changes #ownership #appliances #amount #time #housework #household #country
The given line charts display
a
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the
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percentage
 of electrical appliances which
household
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households
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 own and
a
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the
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 time of people doing housework per week.
Overall
, it is plain to see that all categories of electrical
product
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products
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increase
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increased
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 over
a
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an
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 89-year period. In more detail, The
percentage
 of
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 increased sharply, from 0% to 90%.
In addition
, the data reached a peak in 1980
,
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apply
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 and remained stable between 1980 and 2019.
Also
, there was a gradual growth in the
percentage
 of
vacuum
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a vacuum
the vacuum
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cleaner
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cleaners
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 with
a
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an
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 increasing
20
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of 20
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%
in
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apply
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every 20 years
,
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apply
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 and reached a high in 2000. The presentation of washing
machine
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machines
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 saw
a
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the
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 highest number at the beginning,
however
, the data only rose gradually. The number of hour
spending
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spent
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 on housework
experience
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experienced
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 a marked dip, from 50 to 20 hours, between 1920 and 1960.
Then
, the number had a slight decrease over a 59-year period.
To sum up
, with the growing
percentage
 of using electrical appliances, the time
which
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apply
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spend on housework
become
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becomes
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 lower.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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