A museum is near your home looking for people to do part time unpaid work. You would like to do some unpaid work at the museum Write a letter to the museum director to apply.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I would like to apply

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the part-time voluntary position at Hill´s Museum. I have been searching for

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apply

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unpaid

work

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since I settled in town

last

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month. To be working there might be useful to research about Canada´s Civilization history and for sure will

depper

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deeper

my kwnolagde and

certanily

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certainly

contribute

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the immigration process that I have just applied for. I

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graduated

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Geographic and finished

master´s

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a master´s

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course in philosophy. I have got experience in

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the museum

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museum

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museums

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since I had been working in my hometown for the past year. The people

who

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work

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for used to say that I am

collaborative

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a collaborative

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, open-mind and easy person to deal

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with.

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, I

brang

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bring

recommedation

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recommendation

letter from my previous job which is attached. My schedule is not busy and I can be available as soon as possible. I might prefer

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work

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morning

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times as long the

museus

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museum

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opens by eight. It won´t be a problem to

work

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weekend

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or on

holidays

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breaks. I look forward to

hear

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from you. Sincerely, Ana Tox

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

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7 paragraphs

177 words

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