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A museum is near your home looking for people to do part time unpaid work. You would like to do some unpaid work at the museum Write a letter to the museum director to apply.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I would like to apply
to
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 the part-time voluntary position at Hill´s Museum. I have been searching for
a
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unpaid
work
 since I settled in town
last
 month. To be working there might be useful to research about Canada´s Civilization history and for sure will
depper
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deeper
 my kwnolagde and
certanily
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certainly
 contribute
for
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 the immigration process that I have just applied for. I
am
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graduated
in
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 Geographic and finished
master´s
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a master´s
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 course in philosophy. I have got experience in
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the museum
a museum
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museum
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museums
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 since I had been working in my hometown for the past year. The people
who
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 I
work
 for used to say that I am
collaborative
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a collaborative
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, open-mind and easy person to deal
.
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Also
, I
brang
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bring
 a
recommedation
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recommendation
 letter from my previous job which is attached. My schedule is not busy and I can be available as soon as possible. I might prefer
work
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at
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morning
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the morning
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 times as long the
museus
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museum
museums
 opens by eight. It won´t be a problem to
work
 on
weekend
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weekends
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 or on
holidays
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 breaks. I look forward to
hear
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 from you. Sincerely, Ana Tox
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