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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foregin country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Many argue that the purpose of acquiring a foreign
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 is to visit another
country
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 and
to
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find a job in
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another country
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country
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. While
people
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 should learn
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 for travel and work, I believe
people
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also
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 need to learn
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 for
language
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 study and for cultural knowledge. On one hand,
people
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 must focus on learning a non-native
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 prior to visiting
other
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another country
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country
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 whose
people
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 speak
different
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a different
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language
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. If
people
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 do not gain enough exposure to a foreign dialect before
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 to that specific
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, they would face various problems like communication.
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, when a person moved to
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non native
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 place, he needs to use that
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's
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 to buy groceries and rent. Another point to consider for learning a foreign
language
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 is to work efficiently in different countries. Better job performance is possible when
people
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 can understand other
people
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 better so that communication becomes easy and reliable.
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, it is
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 essential to learn a non-native
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 to understand other cultures and societies. There are thousands of different customs and societies
exist
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that exist
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 in
this
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 world. Learning
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culture
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cultures
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 would be beneficial for us to understand our own existence. In
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 regard acquiring
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 is essential.
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, if we study the origin of our own
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, we will find that not only
our
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language
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’s origin is same
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as
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 other
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countries
country's
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countries’
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language
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 but
also
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 our culture Is similar to that of
other
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another country
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country
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. Another aspect of learning a different
language
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 is that it strengthens our brain’s capacity. It is scientifically proved that
people
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 who know various languages
their
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apply
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brain
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brains
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function
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functions
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efficiently
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more efficiently
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 than those who do not know more than one
language
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. To conclude,
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 the reason for learning a foreign
language
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 to travel and to do a job in
different
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a different
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country
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 is acceptable, It is
also
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 important to learn a different
language
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 to know other cultures and to enhance our brain function.
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