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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work , job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being.

#people #part #adult #life #work #job #satisfaction #element
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 satisfaction is believed to
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 vital aspect of one's self
statisfaction
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satisfaction
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happy life.To be satisfied with a
job
.
However
,many expectations need to be fulfilled.I think that delight
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jobs
 remains a distant dream for the majority of employees. To
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 with,the
first
 point is that an individual
choose
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 a
job
 that matches his skill set and where he could find
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mental satisfaction.While a
job
 that provides a sense of
fulfillment
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,
secure
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 working environment and pays well is a desired
job
 for many.Traditionally,a
job
 that has
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social status,better pay norm and gives freedom to
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an employee
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employee
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employees
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 is said to be dream
jobs
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.Some
improtant
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important
 factors like adequate holidays, learning
opportunity
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opportunities
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,career growth,
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 decent Boss behaviour, nice co-workers,
job
 security and
fair
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 working environment are often considered the most important aspects of a
job
.In fact,
a
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 nice work should guarantee progress.
For example
, training courses that help
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employee
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 gain new skills would help improve
his
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 career and
hence
 benefit
his
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 workplace and
his
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 community as well.
On the other hand
,work enjoyment and expectation of workers change with time.It is almost unrealistic to define
va
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a
job
 which is perfect and completely satisfactory for all.
In addition
,some people
unsatisfied
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 with their
jobs
 because of poor
payment
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,
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other
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 complain about the future prospect.Even if these criteria are met in
job
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the job
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.Every workplace has its
owned
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 unique culture and style.
Therefore
 the workers should adapt and adjust themselves to
working
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the working
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 environment. In conclusion,It is true that adults are spending a lot of their time at work.
Thus
jobs
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gratisfaction
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gratification
satisfaction
 is an important thing.There are several factors that contribute to
job
 happiness but some are realistic while
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 are just not
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