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Some people think there should be free health care for all people, but others disagree. Discuss both sides.

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It is undeniable that when people get older, the cost of medical fees grows significantly. While many are of the opinion that wellness programs should be available to everyone without payment, there are those who disagree entirely believing that these services should be reserved for specific groups. In my opinion, everybody is entitled to equal rights concerning access to medical facilities. Does society feel stronger about one perspective over the other? I will discuss both negatives and positives of
this
 trend with supporting examples. On the one hand, in order to reach the aforementioned target , a great deal of money is required which increases the financial burden on countries.
Moreover
,the number of medical providers and doctors is too small compared with that of communities which causes a tremendous workload.
For example
, in Thailand despite primary care being free, there aren’t enough medics to facilitate the needs.
Thus
, it is apparent that managed care should be limited to those who really need it.
On the other hand
, society should have
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 quality of
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 by receiving free health management because it is a basic need.
Furthermore
, it will reduce the gap between the rich and the poor as well as provide another level of well-being.
For instance
, in South Africa,
although
 there are high rates of unemployment and poverty ,the residents are able to see specialists.
Hence
, it is evident that free of charge preventive care brings about myriad benefits in terms of security and standard of living
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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