Many people think that if plenty of death system introduce in country the crimate rate get decrease. Do you agree or disagree?

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Innovation and technological enhancements have become a need for the era. The world is going through a sea-change. With all

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,improvements the

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rate has

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increased exponentially.

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, a group of

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consider the death penalty as the only option to control the

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rate.

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, I don’t stand with

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view. In the upcoming, paragraphs one is going to discuss the merits and demerits of

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a penalty and evolve a conclusion from them.

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with, A vast number of

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in developing countries are not able to meet their day to day needs,

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they involve themselves in

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for quick money.

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, if the primary needs of any civilians

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taken care of by the government

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the

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will decrease.

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, In the USA, an elder person robbed a gas station for just $1; After committing the

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rather than running away, he was waiting for him to get arrested. During the

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examination he mentioned, that he is going through a lot of medical and financial issues. The

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will help him as ,In the jail, the government will take care of his medical problems and he will

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get a roof and food. On a contrary, Other feels that capital punishment has numerous advantages.

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, it creates fear among

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they will refrain from committing

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crimes.

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, maintaining prisons and prisoners in the jail

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needs a handful of money. A bunch of

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consider the money used after them as a dead investment so they support capital punishment. To conclude, Life is beautiful and everyone has an equal right to live. if proper education and employment opportunities are provided

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the

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rate will certainly be reduced.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 7.0

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Grammatical Range: 7.0

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Many people think that if plenty of death system introduce in country the crimate rate get decrease. Do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Animals are always better off the wild. Do you agree or disagree?

Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations. Skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork should not be taught at school as it is better to learn these from family and friends. To that extent do you agree or disagree.

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative situation?

More and more people are forgetting the actual meaning of occasions (e.g. national festivals). What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions do you suggest?

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. DO the advanatges of this outweigh the disadvantages?