Many people think that if plenty of death system introduce in country the crimate rate get decrease. Do you agree or disagree?

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Innovation and technological enhancements have become a need for the era. The world is going through a sea-change. With all

such

,improvements the

crime

rate has

also

increased exponentially.

However

, a group of

people

consider the death penalty as the only option to control the

crime

rate.

However

, I don’t stand with

this

view. In the upcoming, paragraphs one is going to discuss the merits and demerits of

such

a penalty and evolve a conclusion from them.

To begin

with, A vast number of

people

in developing countries are not able to meet their day to day needs,

thus

they involve themselves in

crime

for quick money.

Hence

, if the primary needs of any civilians

Change the verb form

are

show examples

taken care of by the government

then

the

crime

will decrease.

For instance

, In the USA, an elder person robbed a gas station for just $1; After committing the

crime

rather than running away, he was waiting for him to get arrested. During the

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apply

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examination he mentioned, that he is going through a lot of medical and financial issues. The

crime

will help him as ,In the jail, the government will take care of his medical problems and he will

also

get a roof and food. On a contrary, Other feels that capital punishment has numerous advantages.

Firstly

, it creates fear among

people

hence

they will refrain from committing

such

crimes.

Secondly

, maintaining prisons and prisoners in the jail

also

needs a handful of money. A bunch of

people

consider the money used after them as a dead investment so they support capital punishment. To conclude, Life is beautiful and everyone has an equal right to live. if proper education and employment opportunities are provided

then

the

crime

rate will certainly be reduced.

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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