Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertianment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decesions about matters that affect them. Dicuss both these views and give you own opinion.

People
have various options about
children
should choose their daily matters
such
as choosing food what they like to eat, clothes what they like to wear or not. It has
been become
Change to the active voice
become
show examples
a controversial topic whereas some
people
think it will lead to a selfish society with
people
who will only think
themsleves
Correct your spelling
themselves
while other
people
hold the option that it will increase the confidence and
independency
Correct your spelling
independence
show examples
of
children
and they will become the responsible adults in the future.
First
of all, the opponents of
this
phenomenon highlight that
by
Change preposition
apply
show examples
letting choose whatever
children
want to do, it will make a habit of only looking for
about
Change preposition
apply
show examples
their
sakes
Fix the agreement mistake
sake
show examples
and causes them to become egocentric
people
. By virtue of that, they will have a thought that they are the centre of the universe.
Moreover
,
parents
cannot
fulfill
Change the spelling
fulfil
show examples
everything that their
children
ask for because of different
scienrios
Correct your spelling
scenarios
. For
examples
Fix the agreement mistake
example
show examples
, expensive food and
colthes
Correct your spelling
clothes
cannot be afforded by
parents
with financial constraints or junk foods and snacks that are too sweet are not really
appropirate
Correct your spelling
appropriate
for
children
's health and in these matters,
parents
should not let them have whatever they want.
On the other hand
, the advocates point out that if
children
can choose or do the things without depending on their
parents
since they were young, they will have hardly
difficulties
Correct quantifier usage
any difficulties
show examples
with problems that will be encountered in the future.
Also
, they will have a sense of choice even at
their
Change the word
an
show examples
early age and their own styles or likes rather than chosen by their mothers.
Furthermore
, they are more
Correct your spelling
likely
show examples
likey
Correct your spelling
likely
show examples
to be decisive compared to the ones who are selected
everything
Change preposition
for everything
show examples
by
thier
Correct your spelling
their
guardians.
Consequently
, those will be leaders in their fields of
fututre
Correct your spelling
future
carrers
Correct your spelling
careers
carriers
since their
decesions
Correct your spelling
decisions
are precise and perfect. In a nutshell, I pen down saying that merits of permitting
children
to choose have overwhelmed its
demrits
Correct your spelling
demerits
and
as a result
,
this
will lead
children
to become better persons.
Submitted by ivvitest3 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: