many manufactured food and drink product contain high level of sugar, which causes many health problem. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. do you agree or disagree ?

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manufacturers
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food and drinks
products
contain
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an increase
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increase
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level of
sugar
, which
solve
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many health problems.
Sugary
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product
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products
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should be made more expensive to encourage individuals to consume less
sugar
.
However
, there are numbers of arguments that surround my opinion which
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will delve my upcoming
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paragraph
. Analyzing the statement and explaining
further
,
first
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and foremost reason behind
this
is that government should
making
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a law for
sugar
products
less than 15%
in
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of
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all
product
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products
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.
For
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explane
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explain
, it is very beneficial for
people
to government should
making
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a new team to check all
product
in
sugar related
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and do not seal in the mall and supermarkets. It is better for
humans
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life
. The key point
of
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justify
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the
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my idea could be illustrated by a tangible example, The serva was conducted by
india
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government in 2019 60 %
people
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of people
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was face
diatecese
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diocese
diabetes
to use more
sugar
product
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products
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.
As a result
, it is better to authorities should making new
law
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laws
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to check all
product
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products
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in the lab. Probing a head, one of the main
for
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underlying
reason
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reasons
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stems from the fact that companies want to provide
sugar free
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sugar-free
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products
in the market. To explicate it, it is good for individuals healthy
life
to
luanch
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launch
new
products
in market and
people
are using
this
product
and stay
fet
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fit
and healthy in our
life
.
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. The serva was considered by oxfords
university
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in London
suggests
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and suggests
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that
2020
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in 2020
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people
are using
sugar free
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product
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products
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in
this
day they will be researching 45%individual decrease disease in
used
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this
product
.
Thus
, it is beneficial for all nations to provide a
sugar free
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product
for every
people
. To conclude,
Although
authorities should be able to provide
better
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a better
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product
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products
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in the nation to stay healthy in our
life
yet
people
should
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use
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the
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apply
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sugar free
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sugar-free
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product
to decrease the disease.
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