many manufactured food and drink product contain high level of sugar, which causes many health problem. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. do you agree or disagree ?

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food and drinks
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contain
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an increase
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increase
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level of
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, which
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many health problems.
Sugary
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product
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products
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should be made more expensive to encourage individuals to consume less
sugar
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.
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, there are numbers of arguments that surround my opinion which
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and foremost reason behind
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is that government should
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a law for
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products
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less than 15%
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all
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and do not seal in the mall and supermarkets. It is better for
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the
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my idea could be illustrated by a tangible example, The serva was conducted by
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government in 2019 60 %
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people
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was face
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diocese
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product
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products
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.
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, it is better to authorities should making new
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to check all
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product
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products
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in the lab. Probing a head, one of the main
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underlying
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stems from the fact that companies want to provide
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sugar free
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products
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in the market. To explicate it, it is good for individuals healthy
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to
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launch
new
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in market and
people
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are using
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product
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and stay
fet
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fit
and healthy in our
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in London
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that
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people
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are using
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sugar free
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in
this
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day they will be researching 45%individual decrease disease in
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this
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, it is beneficial for all nations to provide a
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for every
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. To conclude,
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authorities should be able to provide
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a better
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in the nation to stay healthy in our
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yet
people
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should
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the
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sugar free
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product
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to decrease the disease.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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