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Some people believe that Internet users should be able to express any kind of opinion online. Other people feel that government or the companies that own wesites should put limits in what people can say online. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, the issue of the range of freedom of expression online has been a subject that heated debate. Some
people
 assert that Internet users should be able to say their
opinions
 without any restriction while others argue
otherwise
. Personally, I strongly agree with the former stance. In
this
 essay, the views and reasons will be exerted before a conclusion is reached with my opinion. On the one hand, some
people
 believe that the government or the corporations that own websites should restrict what
people
 can say online
,
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 because if they do not,
many
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 wrong information or false facts should increase on their websites.
For example
, a company which
make
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 and
sell
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sells
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 processed food operated their homepage without any limit
in
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on
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 what
people
 say online
last
 year. During that year the company had s serious because of anonymous slanderous statements
in
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 their product on their website. In my point of view,
however
, infringing
people
`s freedom
of
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 saying their
opinions
 on the Internet can cause severe human rights and social development
problem
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.
For example
, if the government limits
people
`s expression about their policies online, they may not be able to hear what the
people
 really want, and it leads to
fail
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 of their policies. In light of the above, I find it more persuasive. In conclusion, infringing
people
`s freedom
of
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to
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 saying their
opinions
 on the Internet is
contentious
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 topic because there are many
opinions
 which support or oppose
this
 basic idea.
However
, after considering
this
 matter in a careful manner, I personally believe that the advantage of giving
people
 the right to say their
opinions
 online without any restriction far
outweigh
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 the drawbacks.
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