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Some people say that all popular TV programs should aim to educate about important social issues do you agree or disagree???

It is clear that one of the popular
media
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TV
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on
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people
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view
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views
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.
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community
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communities
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 claim that
TV
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 show should use their potential
people
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to
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 a local or global subject
that is
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 crucial for their
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 I totally agree with
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 statement and in forthcoming
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 I shall explain my point of view.
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one
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the one
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 hand nowadays all
people
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 especially youngsters have got used to social
media
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 and the internal to their free time and now about
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their
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 environment rather than televisions
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program
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programs
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hence
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weaver
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become
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 less and less annually. A good instance
was happened
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 in 2 2019 when
people
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 and
new
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 generation with sharing information about a new virus which was spreading in China in mass
media
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 many
people
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 around the world attract to
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 and
then
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director
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directors
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 of
TV
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 shows and canals started to create
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program
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a program
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 about it but
people
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 could have been able to share their experience and
knowledge
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 directly and clearly which was more
affective
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 to increase
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knowledge
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 in the internet and social
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if you are
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, if you are people watching the televisions,
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people
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 watching the televisions shows
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 teaching views or educate them doesn't work.
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 the majority of
people
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 watch well now programs in their routine because they looking for
a suitable resources
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suitable resources
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 of information and
knowledge
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 because canals or shows could have been able
to
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gain the trust of
people
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.
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 between 2019 and 2021 many
people
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 around the world watch
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 to get
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 news about Kuwait 19 and
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 advice
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 the governments. Almost all of the
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program
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programs
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 on your 38 away
to
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teach the
people
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 to against that virus a specially
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those
were
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that were
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 more popular rather than
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other
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others
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other
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people
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watching
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watch
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 television
show
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keep
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to keep
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 themselves safe encounter fake news and wrong data. It is
responsibility
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the responsibility
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 of
TV
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 shows in
social
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a social
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 critical
situation
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situations
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influence
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to influence
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on
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people
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's
view
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views
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 about
a
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issue. To sum
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their
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 seem to be a space between
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 and
TV
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filling
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 by
internet
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the internet
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 and social
media
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 but television and its
program
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 still could be a massive impact on each Nation and directors should use
this
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for
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to
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 open
people
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's eyes
on
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to
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 social issues. It would be better if
TV
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 shows Jain
knowledge
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 and attract
people
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 to
crucial
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the crucial
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problem
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problems
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 as much as they can

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