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some people think that the best way to increase wrote safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving car and riding motorbikes??!

#people #safety #age #car #motorbikes
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In current society, some people believe that the older the weather out
safety
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 which is the background of increasing the minimum legal
age
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 for deriving reaction I completely agree with
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 statement and explain my point of view and support the idea On one hand, some vehicles like motorbikes are in essence dangerous because they are no shield and others could injure the
driver
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 directly even if the
driver
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 was not a youth
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road
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safety
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 have countless items which can impact on it like the standard of the
road
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 speed limit and even weather in the time of accident those item mentioned could be able to make roads on safe none of them have no relevance with legal
age
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 of driving the fact that cannot be tonight is improving
road
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safety
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 need to the group decision that should have been made.
on the other hand
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 as a statisticalrespectivelyrespective ly at that few word
driver
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 and the
road
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 the better way
safety
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 theirs if
there
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 norm
driver
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 hook with
drive
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a drive
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 to like in limiting
age
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 causing a massive chord on the
road
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, especially
in
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 the highway where street limit had been increased young your people with some basic experience of driving in the highway with the highest peak capable to make terrible accident it needs government increase the minimum
age
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 of driving as much as they tor to keep safe trans
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 sum up,
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 there are a lot of factors
could
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that could
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 peel Rose a safer place path
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 without
law
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laws
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such
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 as
rising
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age
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 of
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driver
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drivers
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 all of them will be useless
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