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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #teenagers #community #work #time #benefit
In contemporary
society
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 it is quite often argued that the children must be encouraged to do community
works
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. Some people are fond of
this
 idea and eager to support it in
further
 development.
However
, the others claim that adolescents have to live without any extra pressure in order to not harm their mental and physical condition. On the one hand, I do support the notion that we must be careful
on
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 putting pressure
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younger generation by giving them an additional
job
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.I
also
 was a teenage girl and I have faced lots of older people saying me to do
a
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household chores during my leisure TIME so that I could give a hand to my parents.
Nevertheless
, we should take into account their school timetable, extracurricular activities and the time that they spend with their peers.
THEREFORE
 ,I SOMEWHAT HOLD THE IDEA OF NOT forcing them to work freely for
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 well-being of
environment
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.
On the other hand
, I
also
 agree that sometimes we have to make them
to
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be engaged in certain
kind
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 of activity.No matter how much we say that it will have a negative effect on them,
although
 there is a distinct advantage
of
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this
 argument. By doing community services for a free they definitely would contribute
in
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a
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 welfare of our society.
Thus
, they will comprehend how or in which aspect they are most capable to fulfill their duty as a civilian in the future. To sum up, I firmly concede that if we really care for the development and a bright future of our community, it is time
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 considerate action. By teaching and
practicing
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 gratis activities among the youngsters ,we certainly
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 them to live in a strong and prospered country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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