A rise in the standard of living in a country often only seems to benefit cities rather than rural areas. What problems can this cause? How might these problems be reduced?

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Urban cities benefit during a rise in a nation's average income and community purchasing power, while country cities do not experience the same. The paragraphs below will outline why an increase in
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average earnings can augment basic good prices and limit the
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access to some services, and how the government and each individual can help
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the damage.
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increase in the average wealth of the
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, the main issue would be in the base price of simple products. Following the law of supply and demand, as capitals have major populations and larger employability rates, prices in the industry of these locations would become higher, harming nearby regions that are often supplied by these capitals. Another problem is that wages in rural areas are
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than
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ones. In many, a minimum salary cannot afford the basic necessities to maintain a decent quality of life,
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, diminishing a part of the
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access to some services and products.
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,
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situation is inevitable since most
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economical goal is to turn their currency internationally stronger, there are some attitudes that could be implemented to contour and ameliorate
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issue that rural areas experience.
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of all, the government could use
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public policies to assist these regions.
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, in Brazil, there is a monetary aid given to professionals whose
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did not embrace the basic needs,
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as a basic food basket and a house rent.
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, the
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should learn about financial awareness. Economists suggest that individuals should start exchanging expensive products
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more affordable ones with the same utility,
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, avoiding unnecessary
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resources. To conclude, the rising prices and the financial limitation of the community to consume
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merchadises
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are some of the problems that
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from the rise in the
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standard
of living. In spite of that, the implementation of public policies and a change in purchasing habits of the
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can contour
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issue.
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