In their advertising, business is nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is it? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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generation, there
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variety
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of
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surrounding our life. Some corporations tend to put more
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an emphasis on which
thsy
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they
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product
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products
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. Some people
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, whereas others argue that there are more negative effects
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. In
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and give my own opinion.
First
of all,
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product
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products
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absolutely
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consumers
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attention simply.
For example
, if customers shop
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store
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, they will be attracted by the big label which
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a
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big slogan of
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arrival.
Moreover
,
this
can increase the revenue for
company
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the company
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.
Secondly
, to emphasize the new products,
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will see the improvement of a
company
.
In addition
, some categories of products need to innovate new
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to
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the public.
Thirdly
, due to the competitive market,
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a
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new items not only attract
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interest but
also
let others can not mimic them.
On the other hand
, too many
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advertisements
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about
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new items
also
bring
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some negative influences.
First
, continuing
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their fame
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physical or digital format to the public, people may feel annoyed. When the time
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by,
community
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will ignore
this
advertisement.
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this
is not a long-term marketing plan for any item.
Second
, some
customer
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customers
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may not want to be
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first
user. They will wait until some influencers post their reviews or recommendations.
Consequently
, the number of sales may decrease. To sum up, it seems that emphasizing new products is significant.
However
, The
company
should aware of the short-term marketing method and
also
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way
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to progress a wide range of advertising.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • novelty
  • excitement
  • latest trends
  • improvements
  • advancements
  • differentiating
  • competitors
  • innovation
  • progress
  • attracting attention
  • generating curiosity
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