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Social media sites like Facebook and Twiter have more negative effects than possitive effects. How much you agree with this opinion and why?

#media #sites #facebook #twiter #effects #possitive
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recent years our technology step forward,
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society. Facebook and
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people from anywhere by using a finger on
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easier.
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fake news. Some users upload
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sensitive data or videos on these
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children or a teenager have access
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 they watch a
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 videos and got scared. In
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, the management team of these
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative effects
  • positive effects
  • increased exposure
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • mental health
  • productivity
  • privacy concerns
  • fake news
  • misinformation
  • time-consuming
  • addictive
  • superficial connections
  • real-life interactions
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