• In many countries today, many highly qualified graduates struggle to find employment. What factors may have caused this situation? What can be done about it?

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It is true to say that graduated students are quite stressed. Nowadays, many highly qualified graduates struggle to find employment. In the following paragraph, I will explain the causes of unemployment
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crisis. On the one hand, There are a lot of factors to unemploy.
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, Overpopulation
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show that all 40-59 age periods were hired before the student graduated.
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, the Covid-19 pandemic make a lot of people unemployed during the lockdown and graduated students can not find a job during lockdown for around one year. After that, It has the
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generation graduated from university.
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, It has a number of people find employment.
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, Economic growth decline and Inflation
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show companies' expenses higher than in the past.
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, Customers have demanded less than in the past because household expenses are higher. So, Demand and supply in the economic market are contrasting which affects to employment problem.
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, I will graduate in the
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month of the 2022 year and my country is
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problem.
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, I prepare to find a scholarship to study in developed countries for a postgraduate degree.
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, I try hard to practice language skills not only in English but
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in French and German because I believe that I can have a better future through education. In conclusion, All teenagers in the world are confronted with these
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. So, Not be serious and take it easy. I believe everyone will find a light at the end of the tunnel.
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