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In number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transportation.

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The availability and access to any type of
knowledge
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 and
information
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 should be a basic human right. Humankind has made
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 much advancement in technology and science due to work done by their predecessors. Without ancient
knowledge
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, we wouldn't have been in the position where we are right now. The concept of schools and universities flourished so that
people
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 can share and learn from each other. In my opinion, it is very important to share
information
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 with each other whether it be scientific, business, or academic-related.
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, if Tesla, the greatest scientist, and engineer in the world hasn't shared his
knowledge
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 of AC power, we would not have been getting cheaper electricity today. The cost of setting up DC power plants is more expensive and even the infrastructure required to transmit the DC is more expensive as compared to the AC.
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, in the favor of
people
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 who think that
information
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 is too valuable to be shared freely, I would say that they are
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 right to some extent.
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, many governments invest heavily in their military R&D programs. The reason is to make the country's military stronger and undefeatable. Any type of research or invention of weaponry can't be shared due to security and financial reasons. USA invested 6 billion dollars in only R&D to make their
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 Boeing plane which can carry 700
people
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 at once. So why would they share
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knowledge
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 with someone for free?
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, many
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 scholars do hard work in their research so they deserve grants for their hard work. In
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 case, the government should buy
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 research and provide it to the public for free. In conclusion, I would say that sharing is caring. It helps the
people
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 around us to grow which will only benefit us. We should leave a better world for our future generations by providing them easy access to every type of
information
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.
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