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Tourism has caused environment problem in many parts of the world. What sort of problems has been caused and what can be done about them.?

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……………. is becoming increasingly severe in various nations in the contemporary world.
Although
 ……………. Threaten[s] numerous species/societies, its /their consequences can be combated conquer .
This
 essay looks at some of the troubles raised by Tourism
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 society
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 and suggests suitable remedies to the problems. ……………. causes multiple problems. The …………….
effects
 are very obvious.
For example
, ……………. In some cases,
such
 as ……………. even leads to (death). The
second
 effect is …………….
People
 who ……………. become …………
However
, the menace of ……………. can be fought. Education is the main way to tackle
this
 issue.
People
 need to be aware of the
effects
 so that they can avoid
this
 problem.
In addition
, the government could
also
 ……………..
This
 is a good approach because …………… In conclusion, ……………. is a serious issue because it causes harmful
effects
 on
people
’s health and
people
 who are ……………. The best approaches to deal with it are to educate
people
 about its damaging
effects
, and
also
 for the government to ……………..
Although
 the problem is unlikely to be entirely eliminated in the short term there are concrete steps to reduce the
effects
 it is having on the current society.
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