A friend of yours is thinking about applying for the same course that you did at university. He has asked for your advice about studying this subject.

Dear Anna, It was nice to hear from you and your desire to study nutrition. I have got some
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for you which I think will help you decide to take the course or not. The subject that I like most
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was about
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,
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a restaurant. I am quite sure you know about my
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,
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demands effort and you will get used to
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to decide what fits betters on your personality, maybe you think about looking after people caring
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or going straight to work with
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security. The University is quite excellent in any area you going to choose.
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, I would say that
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at Mc Mills College is the best option nearby. The University has
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the end, your
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in is not as easy as we think. In advance you should take
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test, make a good research project and e-mail a Professor,
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required. I am here if you need extra help. Best wishes, Ana B.
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  • prospective student
  • alma mater
  • curriculum
  • faculty
  • state-of-the-art
  • extramural
  • scholarly pursuits
  • cohort
  • accreditations
  • holistic development
  • pedagogy
  • thesis
  • dissertation
  • prerequisites
  • mentorship
  • application portal
  • tuition fees
  • scholarships
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  • internship opportunities
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  • deadline
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