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Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Eating at
food
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 stands or
restaurants
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 is one of the choices for people.
While
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 some people like to eat outside, others love to cook their
meals
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 by themselves at their house. In my opinion, I prefer to prepare and eat at home because of some reasons. First of all, cooking
meals
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 by myself is quite more economical than going to
food
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 parks. Some
restaurants
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 add extra costs,
such
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 as service charges, to the bill.
Moreover
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, there are a lot of expenses that the owners of
restaurants
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 have to pay every month,
such
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 as the cost of renting, electricity bills and water supply charges.
Therefore
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, they have to add these expenses to the price of
food
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. That makes the
food
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 price per dish
increases
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increase
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 more than normal.
On the contrary
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, cooking by myself at home, I need to spend money mainly on the ingredients. That makes the cost that I have to pay for the meal cheaper than eating outside.
Next,
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due to
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 making the dishes by myself, I can cook the
food
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 that tastes proper to me. I can add some extra ingredients that I want,
while
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chefs
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the chefs
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 of the
restaurants
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 do not use them normally.
Moreover
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, I can assure you that the
meals
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 that I cook are clean. I can control the hygiene of my kitchen and my equipment.
As well as
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 the processes of cooking, I can make sure that all ingredients are clean by washing them.
Furthermore
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, I can control the quantity of
food
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that is
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 appropriate for me. In my conclusion, I actually refer to cooking the
meals
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 by myself at my house. I think that preparing
food
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 and eating it at home can help me to decrease my daily life
expense
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expenses
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.
Moreover
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, I can determine every important factor in making dishes.
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task response
Provide a more in-depth discussion of why you prefer to prepare and eat at home, with more specific reasons and examples to support your preference.
coherence and cohesion
The logical structure of the essay is good, but try to link your ideas more cohesively using linking words and transition phrases.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas more precisely and creatively.
grammatical range
There is a good range of grammatical structures, but some errors in sentence structure and word choice affect the overall fluency of the essay.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Hygiene
  • Variety
  • Quality control
  • Dietary preferences
  • Social atmosphere
  • Routine
  • Intimate
  • Economical
  • Culinary skills
  • Creativity
  • Inspiration
  • Experience
  • Bonding
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