Many animal species are becoming extinct as a result of human activities. What are the causes and possible solutions to this problem?

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These days people place a premium on
environment
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. While their activities have been having
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effect on nature. In
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animal extinction and give some
solution
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to
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problem. To advance a convincing theory I could deal with, deforestation.
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of construction, many
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trees
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have been demolished. Threes are the house or the food source for animals.
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to what I have just said, pollution. It has had dire consequences on their life.
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, light pollution disturbs their sleep. On top of that air and water pollution are another contributing factor in killing them. Not
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but not least, fossil fuels. On the grounds that, It is extracted an utilized, it has caused
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gases that leads to global warming. And global warming
give
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rise to
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the melting
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of ice in
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and south poles.
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animals which live there are
in
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dangered.
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our activities have had
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effect on their lives, we can come over
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problem by burning less fuel.
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,
human
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humans
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should be encouraged to use public transportation.
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, renewable resources should be used
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of nonrenewable ones.
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, sun, wind and water power can be used for lightening and warming. Another feature which I could mention is, planting. Farming leads to
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of large areas of the planet. To conclude, all in all, our
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foot print
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on the earth is really clear. Gone is the idea of the earth will construct itself.
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