Many animal species are becoming extinct as a result of human activities. What are the causes and possible solutions to this problem?

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These days people place a premium on

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. While their activities have been having

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effect on nature. In

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essay, I want to discuss

about

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animal extinction and give some

solution

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this

problem. To advance a convincing theory I could deal with, deforestation.

As a result

of construction, many

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trees

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have been demolished. Threes are the house or the food source for animals.

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to what I have just said, pollution. It has had dire consequences on their life.

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, light pollution disturbs their sleep. On top of that air and water pollution are another contributing factor in killing them. Not

last

but not least, fossil fuels. On the grounds that, It is extracted an utilized, it has caused

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gases that leads to global warming. And global warming

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rise to

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of ice in

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and south poles.

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animals which live there are

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dangered.

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our activities have had

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effect on their lives, we can come over

this

problem by burning less fuel.

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human

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humans

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should be encouraged to use public transportation.

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, renewable resources should be used

instead

of nonrenewable ones.

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, sun, wind and water power can be used for lightening and warming. Another feature which I could mention is, planting. Farming leads to

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of large areas of the planet. To conclude, all in all, our

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footprint

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foot print

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on the earth is really clear. Gone is the idea of the earth will construct itself.

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Many animal species are becoming extinct as a result of human activities. What are the causes and possible solutions to this problem?

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The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.”

The best way to educate children is by using the Internet in every lesson. To what extent do you share this opinion? What other ways are there of making it effective for children?

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some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Although more and more people use public transport, some city streets are still overcrowded with traffic. How can this problem be solved? Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.