Many animal species are becoming extinct as a result of human activities. What are the causes and possible solutions to this problem?

Well, it is
undeniable
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fact that many rare species at on the edge of extinction
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human activities. The main reason for
this
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is cutting forests and killing
animals
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for
leathers
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leather
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and
hones
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. As it is a very big issue
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it can be solved by making hard rules by lawmakers
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as
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, as
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well as
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the public
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needs to take their social responsibility towards
nature
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.
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, the extinction of
animals
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is arise
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because people are very selfish , they want only their happiness without caring about the
feeling
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feelings
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of others.
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, they cut trees and destroy flora and fauna for their needs.
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,
animals
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lose their habitat
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, and
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people kill
animals
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for their various parts
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, which
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have high value in the market
like
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, like
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leathers
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leather
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and
hones
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bones
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.
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, tigers are a highly dangerous species nowadays
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, which
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is on the edge of extinction because people kill them for their leather and teeth.
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,
this
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problem can be solved by imposing high fines and punishment if anyone
finds
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guilty
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do
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committing
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this
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crime.
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will surely help to stop
killing the
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the killing
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animals
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of animals
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, humans should take responsibility to save
nature
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and species for
upcoming
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the upcoming
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generations so that they can enjoy them and get benefits from
nature
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.
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, the government makes laws to save jungles and
animals
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by restricting the areas which are really
appreciatable
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valuable
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. In conclusion,
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sometimes humans interfere
destroy
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and destroy
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nature
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and kill
the
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apply
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animals
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, everyone
doing
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is doing
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their best to make
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place better for all living
to
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things to
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save
animals
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and plant more trees.

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task response
Work on making each part fit the task. Give more detail on each cause and plan for a fix.
coherence
Make the flow clear. Use linking words like also, but, so, because to join ideas.
grammar
Check the grammar. Use one idea per sentence and avoid long, hard words.
content
Give more specific examples of harm and laws beyond the tiger example.
structure
There is an intro, a body, and a conclusion.
content
A single example (tiger) is used to back up a point.
content
You show a wish to solve the problem with laws and rules.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • home for animals
  • forests
  • roads
  • towns
  • farming
  • hunting
  • illegal trade
  • pollution
  • waste
  • climate change
  • weak laws
  • enforcement
  • protected areas
  • parks
  • education
  • awareness
  • jobs for local people
  • eco-friendly farming
  • restoring land
  • breeding programs
  • international cooperation
  • sustainable use
  • conserve nature
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