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People are surrounded by all kinds of advertising. They both have important and negative influences on our lives. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many Top
brands
 are using
advertisements
 as a medium to sell their
products
 to
people
. Out of these brand's
advertisements
 significantly there are quite a few
products
 which are important and the rest are not so important or not helpful for
people
 in many ways. I agree that some
advertisements
 are creating negative impacts on
people
's thinking.
Firstly
, most of us have developed a habit of buying
products
 that have been advertised. So the
brands
 are taking advantage of these and they are endorsing their
brands
 with celebrities.Today we can see there are numerous advertisement
advertisements
 for the
products
 that we use daily.
Also
,
people
 are falling for these fancy ad commercials and buying a few
products
 which are not necessary. Let me take an example, in India
people
 used to worship movie actors as gods and their role models. so a brand that has been into selling cardamom
products
 has started endorsing one of their pan masala product with a top movie actor. Soon after the commercial aired it has drawn the attention of many
people
.These kinds of commercials are misleading
people
 ,especially the youth whom we can manipulate very easily. To conclude , it will be good if
people
 act wisely while buying the
products
, they should be able to differentiate between the good and the bad ,
also
 buy
products
 which are really useful to them. If
this
 is done
then
 slowly the top
brands
 will stop endorsing these unnecessary
products
 .
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