The shortage of housing in big cities can cause severe consequences .Only government action can solve this problem .To what extent do you agree or disagree

Accommodation is an essential need in our lives.The scarcity of shelter can cause serious
problems
.Some
people
believe that it is the role of the
government
to solve
problems
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of shelter.The
government
can act by creating affordable housing trusts , introducing new home zones and giving incentives to small
builders
.I completely agree that it is solely the
government
's responsibility to solve shelter deficits in cities. The creation of affordable housing trusts aids by giving
people
mortgage
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to buy apartments that can be paid over a certain timeline.
By building
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more apartments and giving loans it helps to mitigate the
problems
of housing in towns.
For
example
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an apartment can accommodate a tremendously higher number of individuals than a house which occupies and wastes land.
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the
government
can introduce new home zones in virgin lands which are nearby the metropolitan.
This
is done to empower individuals who want to build houses and are unable to purchase land or apartments in the city.
As a
result
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it helps to decongest the number of
people
in towns and provides solutions to housing
problems
.
Also
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the
government
should give incentives to small
builders
to enter the market of constructing houses as independent
builders
.
Likewise
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this
helps
people
who are unable to afford professional
builders
to build their homes.In doing so the
government
will be increasing the number of houses for
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citizens. In conclusion ,I believe that it is the
government
's main responsibility to curb the lack of homes in the metropolitan area by providing several measures to accommodate
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citizens.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • public housing
  • overcrowding
  • affordable housing
  • rent control
  • property market
  • infrastructure development
  • sustainable living
  • rural-urban migration
  • real estate regulations
  • zoning laws
  • bureaucracy
  • gentrification
  • economic disparity
  • housing policy
  • social welfare
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