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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals.Other say that there are more important environmental problems Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,it is supported that endangered species are an issue that concerns countless societies across the globe.Despite
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,numerous others claim that there are more appalling environmental problems.In my belief, all living creatures on the planet play a significant role in the earth's ecosystem. On the one hand,the extinction of our flora and fauna entails several damaging effects.
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, plants and animals are considered to be extremely important because without them our habitat will be completely destroyed.
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, it may
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 lead to the catastrophe of our ecological system.
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, as Einstein once said " if bees stop existing, humans will have four years to live " since they contribute to pollinating 80% of the world's plants.Adding to
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,there is ample evidence that today's individuals are the main enemy of animals
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 of our forests,as we are the principal cause of their destruction.As an outcome, if these vital
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 extinct, people will too.
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, humanity has to deal with even more harmful conditions.First and foremost,
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 plenty of others, climate change has a grave impact on our daily
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, deliberate activities
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 as logging,dumping of waste,emissions and water contamination are harming our environment on a daily basis.To illustrate
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,our oxygen is depleted,our water is no longer drinkable and the lack of recycling begins to show its negative results.
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,it is evident that everyone is being affected.
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,by taking all the aforementioned arguments into deep consideration it is apparent that, our home suffers from pollution.I strongly believe that it's our duty to protect our paradise at all costs and most importantly the creatures that we share the earth with.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the introduction clearly states the writer's viewpoint and introduces the main points to be discussed. For the conclusion, summarize the main points and restate the writer's opinion.
task achievement
The essay displays a reasonable level of task response with relevant arguments and examples. However, ensure that the counter-arguments are fully developed and balanced.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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