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Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in? Give reasons for your answer and invlude any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

#people #time #history #invlude
Human has evolved over
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time
 with constant inventions, discoveries, and war within a group leaving a footprint or
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, that we can feel how tough
life
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would be? some
people
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,
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present
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 is
best
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time
 in
history
 to be living. I opine that
,
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current
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the current
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time
 is
better
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a better
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 version to create the
history
 living in humankind.
To begin
 with
history
, there is
huge
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 drift in pursuit of conquering the world at the cost of several wars, building their own kingdom, having regular war
excersises
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exercises
 under the rule of
king
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the king
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 and
also
made
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 the remarkable monuments
as
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a mark of win.
At
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 their
time
, they have experienced the
life
at
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fullest
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 without the mercy
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in-laws
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in
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 laws as they were changed frequently. while,
current
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time
 is more organized under
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certain restrictions and laws encouraging
the
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 healthy environment
on
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 each and every
lives
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life
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,
equal
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and equal
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 opportunities
to
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for
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 the
people
.
Consequently
,
present
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time
 is
a
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the
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 best way to do
the
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remarkable things so that
it
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 can be remembered by the future generation.
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, The great building that
were
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 built
kings
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by kings
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 at their
time
are
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 now being preserved as the symbol of excellent art that cannot be
replicate
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 even
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if it
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it
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 tried to.
Similarly
, The
macintosh
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 computer made by
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Microsoft
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microsoft
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 company was the miracle that initiated the computer era.
still
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people
 refer as
the
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 masterpiece.
In addition
,
latest
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 technologies enable
to
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research more
in depth
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 to discover the unknown and want to have deep study for application in the human
life
 as a beneficial and comfortable source. The renowned institutions are centres to find new technology to enhance the living way of
life
, exploring the other planet
whether
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it
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they
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 can nurture
life
 or not. open thoughts and ideas of
people
 have given
freedom
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the freedom
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 to publish the evidence to dive back into
history
.
for example
, Albert Einstein
have
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 published
a
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breakthroughs
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 in various fields of science, with the help of that most
of
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the research scientists
are
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now have
courage
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 to know the new possibilities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • quality of life
  • technological innovations
  • information and knowledge
  • human rights
  • gender equality
  • social justice
  • economic development
  • globalization
  • standard of living
  • travel
  • experience different cultures
  • environmental awareness
  • conservation efforts
  • sustainable future
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