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Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end world poverty and hunger. Others say that economic growth is causing damage to the environment and should be stopped now. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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While economic development is often touted as the best solution to perpetuating global problems
such
 as underdevelopment and hunger, it has
also
 been criticized for damaging the environment. Both schools of thought have valid arguments, but I believe that increasing economic expansion at the expense of the environment is not a wise decision for humans. Undoubtedly, economic growth has so far been effective in alleviating hunger and hardship worldwide. It is reported that millions of children and adults die each year from malnutrition and related causes of poverty; In
this
 way, the government struggles to bring more food to the masses.
In addition
 to rapid economic growth, there are more and more people with better job prospects and higher wages.
In other words
, more people can now buy groceries and meet their basic needs. The contribution of economic growth to fighting lack and craving is evident.
However
, pursuing economic development has side effects that are very damaging to the environment and threaten human survival. Many of the environmental impacts caused by the intense focus on economic development can be cited as climate change, air pollution, water pollution and loss of wildlife habitat. If the problems that
also
 support
this
 are not prevented or corrected, human existence will be on the verge of danger.
Therefore
, it is very important to slow down the developing world economy so that the country remains livable. In view of all
this
, while economic prosperity provides an effective means of tackling pressing problems
such
 as hunger and poverty, it is not sufficient to ensure environmental security. With
this
 in mind, governments and individuals should work together to increase the positive impact of developing countries on people's living standards and manage their negative impact on the planet.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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