Some people think that government should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternate sources. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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artists
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money. The question is several of society believe that
government
must give financial
supports
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to
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creative
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artists
such
as painters and musicians.
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suppose that
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artists
must be funded? In
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I am going to discuss my opinion.
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side, if
government
give them a salary per month, they work hard more and more. The main reason given to support
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claim is that should
government
open companies for professional
artists
,
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, it makes them
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if
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interests
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competitions who
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artits
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artists
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more confident in front of
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themselves step by step
thus
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matter even
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artists
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support of society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • innovation
  • financial constraints
  • diverse artistic expressions
  • taxpayer money
  • critical areas
  • commercialized
  • private patronage
  • crowdfunding
  • long-term benefits
  • economically beneficial
  • culturally rich
  • alternative funding sources
  • targeted grants
  • financially sustainable
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