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It is not neccessary to travel to other places to learn the culture of other people. We can just learn much from books, films and the internet . Do you agree or disagree ?

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In today's world, Almost every family has a tendency to search on the
internet
 or purchase
books
 ahead of travelling. Some argue that It is not essential to journey to other places to study the
culture
 of other countries, just learn from
books
, movies, and the
internet
. I strongly disagree with
this
 statement for several reasons. In recent years the
internet
 is developing more and more and is becoming more accessible to everyone.
As a result
,
Many
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books
, films, and the
internet
 have presented various cultures to audiences which let them learn more.
However
,
books
 could not describe real
culture
 or images to the reader, while visiting there would give you more experience.
For example
, Once I visited India. It was
whole
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 new to me. people in India are friendlier and kinder than I thought while some minorities underestimate them just from their nationality. Another reason why you should visit there by yourself is you could learn more deeper and understand their inculcation travel and visit a place. they could experience the same situations. Some
culture
 has much more societal information and ancient
culture
.
For instance
, The Danubian
culture
 which is over 1500 years ago.
This
 is about creating goddess figurines to celebrate female strength and beauty. In conclusion, I greatly disagree with
this
 statement. In my opinion, We could learn better by encountering and conducting ourselves. There are many reasons to travel and learn which are
books
 could not describe greater than our sight and learn deeper and understanding by experience is progressive.
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