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Some people think that excessive use of smartphones badly affects teenagers' literacy skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
Smartphones
 are contrasted with five requisites. Some people think that excessive use of
smartphones
 badly affects
teenagers
' literacy
skills
.
However
, I firmly disagree about
this
 opinion and I will explain a reason in the following paragraph. On the one hand, Especially elderly peoples think that
smartphones
 make children's behaviour different from when they were
teenagers
. They are concerned
smartphones
 make children lack some
skills
such
 as If children learn with iPad, They will badly affect to reading and writing
skills
.
On the other hand
, I believe in the opposite viewpoint.
Firstly
, There are a lot of passages for reading on social
media
. Social
media
 complete all topics that we can choose freestyle to read in interesting passages.
For example
, I love to read a history
book
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books
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.
However
, Some books are not published again but we can download and read them in E-book on
smartphones
.
Secondly
, Topic lessons can find comprehensive on social
media
 and students can learn and read lessons for free.
For instance
, We found students must research to do a report from the internet via
smartphones
. It is easier to gain a piece of knowledge than find out in a library room.
Thirdly
,
Teenagers
 have a faster reading skill from reading news on social
media
 make peoples know all news very fast than watching TV that reports only morning, afternoon and night. In conclusion, I do not agree with some people's said the use of
smartphones
 badly affects
teenagers
' literacy
skills
.
However
, I think
teenagers
to
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have gained faster reading
skills
 from reading on
smartphones
.
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