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It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the technological advancement in the stream of civil ,engineering most people fascinates with the modern buildings
instead
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 of renovating old buildings. From my standpoint, I agree with the statement. The forthcoming paragraphs elucidate the relevant reasons with examples to support my opinion. To embark on, spending money on contemporary houses can be beneficial in numerous ways. Nowadays civil engineering technology led to the advancement in the infrastructure of the building. To explain it, a new conception of building using enough strong material and deploying
the
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qualified engineers make the modern
house
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 which is sustainable in natural disasters
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 as storms, and earthquakes.
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, sometimes people end up
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living in
old
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an old
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house
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, because of various reasons,
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 as the lack of proper
utiliztaion
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utilization
 of spaces like vehicle parking space, dissatisfaction of
interior
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the interior
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 of
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house
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the house
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 and many more.
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, old
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house
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houses
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 were not built as per
today
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today's
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 scenario as today's every family is having 2 to 3 vehicles(Car, bike) in their houses.
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, that
house
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 could not cope with these vehicles due to lack of space.
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, making modern
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house
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houses
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 of their own
choices
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choice
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 can be
only
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the only
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 solution
for
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 these problems. To sum up,
although
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 some
community
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communities
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 believe,
building
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that building
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new
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the new
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 contemporary
house
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 will cost extravagant and is time taking process, in my opinion spending money and time on a new
house
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 is a one-time effort that could be assisting society in long run and
to
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cope with the problems that they felt in their old
house
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 and that make them more satisfied.
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