You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part-time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Hello Joseph, I hope everything is fine at your side. I'
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writing
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to give you good news about my admission confirmation
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Canadian University. " I appeared for several entrance exams for admission and
finally
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I got
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admission
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Torrento
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Toronto
University in Mechanical Engineering course which is 4 years program including
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internship. I'
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thinking to travel Canada by January end since
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college will start in
middle
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of February. I got a study loan from
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government
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bank to pay University fees. But I'
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thinking to work for
part time
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after college time and during
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weekends in Canada to get early relief from
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loan
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. I will get financial comfort due to
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while studying there. You may be having contact with employers there since you are in Canada for many years. You can start searching
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part
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time job from now so I can start working as soon as I come there. I'
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about
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. Best regards, Kalpesh Jani
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Educational aspirations
  • Work experience
  • Financial independence
  • Resume (or CV)
  • Local job market
  • International student
  • Legal requirements
  • Student work permit
  • Employment trends
  • Time management
  • Networking
  • A part-time position
  • Balance studies and work
  • Job hunting strategies
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