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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every yong person how to be a good parent Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent

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It is believed by some people that the good concept is schools should be taught every teenager how to be a good mom and dad. I totally agree with
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 notion and the following essay will argue why it is necessary and
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, will describe the bits of knowledge a
person
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 requires when it comes to being a parent. To commence with, there is one main reason why schools need to teach parental skills. Primarily, that knowledge which pupils obtain from the educational centre will be fruitful in a long run.
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, if a student learns everything in the academy
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 when that individual will be either father or mother will not have barriers regarding how to clean the
baby
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's clothes and feed nutrients food to the
baby
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.
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, a recent survey clearly explicated that 50% of children who become
parents
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 face issues when it comes to parenting.
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, it is absolutely vital to
teaching
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 students how to become good
parents
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.
furthermore
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, there are loads of skills which a
person
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 needs to be a nice parent. the
first
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 reason would be a good parent should be calm since a newborn
baby
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 tends to cry and mass at the same time ,
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, an individual needs to be relaxed and think positive. The
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 reason would be understanding. To explain more, needless to ,say that a newborn
baby
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 cannot speak anything
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, a
person
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 should have adequate knowledge about what a
baby
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 wants to say with their hand signals and facial expressions. In conclusion, despite many other education schools should teach how to be
a decent
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a decent parent
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parents
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 so that they will not face any issues when they become
parents
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, skills a
person
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 should learn about how to understand a
baby
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's needs and should be peaceful.
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