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There is too much noise in many public places in cities. What are the causes of this problem? What can be done to solve the problem?

#noise #places #cities
It is undeniable that as
the
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time passes, urban
areas
 are becoming more and more populated, resulting in more
noise
pollution
.
This
 essay will discuss how increased immigration to big
cities
 and developing
industry
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industries
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 lead to
such
 a phenomenon and what
measure
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measures
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 could be taken to tackle
this
 issue. To commence with, as far as reasons are concerned, it is clear that the growing
noise
pollution
 goes hand-in-hand with
increasing
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 rate of
cities
' population. Apparently, a vast number of villagers leave their
hometown
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hometowns
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 due to
lack
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 of job
opportunity
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opportunities
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 and the provision of suitable services, leading to becoming industrial places of
big
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the big
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 city more crowded and noisier.
For example
, a large number of people are commuting
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southwest
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 of Tehran, so, it would be much noisier.
In addition
, as plenty of companies are located in developed
cities
, like Tehran, it makes
such
 regions nosier, especially in rush hours, in comparison with residential
areas
. To cope with
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issue
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, some solutions could be adopted by governments.
First
 of all, some services should be provided to facilitate living in small
cities
 and rural
areas
.
For instance
, if entertainment places, advanced Healthcare
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systems
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, shopping
centers
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,
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etc. were constructed in
such
 places, people would not presumably immigrate to megacities.
Secondly
, governments would be able to provide
youngest
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 in small
cities
 with the opportunity to find jobs by moving corporations closer to small towns, which, in turn, it
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 to lessening
noise
pollution
 in bigger
cities
. In conclusion, it is inevitable that moving people to urban
areas
 in order to take advantage of developed facilities and find jobs are contributing factors
of
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noise
pollution
;
however
, it can be handled by providing
such
 opportunities for individuals in small towns.
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  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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