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Some people believe that violent films are bad for you and encourage people to be violent. Others argue that violence and films are unrelated because violence existed before films. Which of these opinions do you agree with, and to what extent do you agree?

#people #films #violence
Aggressive
movies
 create notions in society.
However
, some other debates about crime and
films
 are not connected. Criminal
activities
 happened a long time ago when
movies
 were not produced. I agree with the
first
 statement that significantly crime rate increases after watching those types of
movies
.
Nevertheless
, we can overcome
this
 issue by providing employment and requesting the
government
 to ban
this
 kind of
movie
 from broadcast in society. I can explain those points with suitable examples in the following paragraph. Nowadays, many film producers are interested in violent
films
 because the public is more affectionate toward action
films
.
However
, these
films
 produce a terrible image in
people
's minds.
People
 can find an easy way to learn how to do criminal
activities
. Sometimes, the mind becomes feistier because of constantly watching these
movies
. Recently one robbery attempts in India after watching the " Pushpa"
movie
.
This
movie
 shows how to smuggle Chandan wood from South India worldwide.
Moreover
, one group can operate smuggling with a similar pattern to
this
movie
 after some time.
On the other hand
,
people
 have numerous ways to outcome with
this
 problem. We have several possible solutions like providing employment to poor
people
 and providing education to earn enough wages and fulfil their basic needs.
In addition
 to that, we are requesting the
government
 to stop permitting these kinds of
movies
.
For instance
, In Bihar, several criminal
activities
 happen in local residential areas.
Nevertheless
, now drastically reducing these
activities
 is because
people
 are more educated, and the
government
 helps them establish numerous industries in
this
 area. To state it briefly, crime-related
movies
 can encourage criminals to do these
activities
 in societies. Meanwhile, the
government
 should take necessary actions against producers and directors to make these types of
movies
.
Submitted by Mayur Patel on

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