Some feel that school uniforms make schools safer for students, create a "level playing field" that reduces socioeconomic disparities and encourage children to focus on their studies rather than their clothes. Others say school uniforms infringe upon students' right to express their individuality, have no positive effect on behaviour and academic achievement. Discuss both sides & give your opinion.

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on whether
students
need to wear
school
uniforms
or not. In the UK is compulsory whereas it is usually not in the US. In the forthcoming essay, I will explain why I am advocating wearing
school
uniforms
. The most prominent reason to support standard
uniforms
in studying places is that
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it reduces competition and comparison on the costumes pupils wear
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. In a
school
, some
students
are more affluent than others and they are able to have
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month. They may even wear expensive branded clothing to attract attention. Not only does it hurt the confidence of those economically weaker
students
but it may even trigger their impoverished counterparts to take up a part-
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in order to catch up with the others.
This
is certainly very detrimental to the studying atmosphere in a
school
.
Moreover
, getting into a daily fashion show takes
time
in the morning and
this
can affect
students
' sleep
time
and cause them to fall asleep during lessons.
This
may end up affecting
students
' academic attainment as well. Some people may argue,
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street clothes in schools is blocking
students
' right to express their personal preferences. I have to say the argument is going too far as young people still have other means to personalize themselves,
such
as different decorations hanging on their schoolbags, as well as diverse hairstyles. To be fair, in terms of
time
and monetary resources spent, the impact of different hairstyles creates a much less impact than
school
uniforms
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, you just cannot change your hair
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. In conclusion, the existence of compulsory
school
uniforms
reduces the monetary resources and
time
spent by
students
, yet it does not necessarily reduce
students
' right to express their personal liking too much.
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