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Nowadays there is an increasing trend of big shopping centres opening up while small shops are closing down. What are the advantages and disadvantages of big shopping centres versus small local shops?

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Nowadays there is an increasing trend of big shopping centres opening up while small shops are closing down. In the following paragraph, I will contrast the advantages and disadvantages that consumers can get it. On the one hand, Increasing of big shopping centres is a
lot
 of benefits.
Firstly
, Big stores have more supply than small shops. There are a
lot
 of promotions when bought in on-site stores.
Moreover
, There has online delivery at home. So, You can choose a product from the collection in application and cash by credit card. Luckily, Some companies always give promotion codes for discounts and
first
 times online customers will receive a
lot
 of discounts.
On the other hand
, the Increasing of big shopping centres has nervous drawbacks.
Firstly
, The grand marketing
business
 will overtake a small entrepreneur
business
. After that, Grand
business
 will have more power from investment and can merge and acquire another small shop. Some countries have a
lot
 of inequality in income status. It makes medium-income citizens poor down to the past.
However
, Grand
business
 is significantly richer than in the past and has more power to negotiate
business
 with the government. If cabinets are interested only in money, They will design a policy to make benefit a grand
business
.
Therefore
, It is the beginning of monopoly
business
 and can tyrannize poor citizens. In conclusion, the Increasing trend of big
business
 even benefits in a short period
such
 as discount prices each time.
However
, from an economic aspect, It will make drawbacks to poor people and make rich people significantly richer by enslaving citizens in the country.
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