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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve the problem?

#plastic #bags #bottles #environment #damage #governments #individuals
Plastic
materials
such
 as bottles,
bags
 and packages are detrimental
for
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 the planet. The damage that
this
 will make to the environment is
waste
 piling
at
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in
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 deep oceans and
most
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 viable solution is to ban all
plastics
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plastic
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materials
 from daily usage. The principal problem associated with the use of
plastic
 creates
massive
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the massive
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 disposal of non-used
materials
 discarded
to
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 seabeds.
This
 may affect the life of aquatic creatures and other mammals unable to survive in the
contaiminated
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contaminated
 water.
Furthermore
, the non-
segeration
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separation
segregation
generation
 of
waste
 products at the origin itself pollutes the air which makes the
atmosphere
 unable to breathe for human beings.
For instance
, in
India
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 13000 tonnes of
plastic
waste
 is getting disposed
to
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 sea channels through which the water
getting
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gets
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 highly poisoned and
affect
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affects
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 the CO2 level in
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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. The preferable solution is to have
complete
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a complete
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 ban
of
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plastic
usuage
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usage
at
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 the earth to avoid any
further
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harm
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arm
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harm
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 to the environment. The main responsibility lies with the government officials to give an alternative polythene recycling
bags
,
bottles
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and bottles
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 for daily usage in the absence of plastics.
This
 way, every individual can make sure that the living environment is free from any
contamination
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 substances in the
atmosphere
.
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Fro
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 example, in India,
since
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 2018 government banned the usage of all the
plastic
materials
 and provided
with
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paper
bags
 for
usuage
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usage
 which make every individual
to
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follow the rule with less impact
to
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 the
atmosphere
. To conclude, the earth with increased
usuage
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usage
 of
plastic
 substances is highly harmful. The main problem that
this
 may make is getting sea filled with
waste
 products and the preferable solution is to avoid all using of
materials
 made from plastics with another suitable type of
bags
 in the market.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plastic pollution
  • ecosystems
  • wildlife
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • air pollution
  • strict regulations
  • plastic consumption
  • eco-friendly alternatives
  • sustainable packaging
  • recycling facilities
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