Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older?
Although
some parents
can buy their children
whatever they ask, and give them permission for whatever they want, I believe this
phenomenon will lead them in bad ways. The consequences would be an impact on their ability to respond to their life and they will very
dependent on their Add a missing verb
be very
parents
.
Firstly
, children
who are always receiving whatever they want will lack responsibility for their own lifestyle. As they are getting older, they need to find a job which demands a lot of accountable
and demanding Replace the word
accountability
job
in the office. If Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
children
always received
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receive
privilege treat
from their Replace the word
privileged treatment
parents
, it is hard to be responsible even for a tiny responsibility in their career life. For example
, one of my colleagues, Tony, decided to resign because his supervisor asked him to work overtime during the weekend due to
an urgent project. Because of that, his company bear a lot of loss because of the delayed projects. Therefore
, allowing children
to receive whatever they want can impact their accountability and performance in their work-life
.
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work life
Secondly
, children
will have such
dependence on their parents
because they cannot do everything by themselves. Furthermore
, children
will not able
to build friendships, Add a missing verb
be able
relationships
and Correct word choice
and relationships
how behaving
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behave
For instance
, when they matured
enough Wrong verb form
mature
for getting
married, they will have the anxiety to start a relationship with their couple because they will leave their Change preposition
to get
parents
. Hence
, this
situation will commonly happen if children
depend on their parents
all the time. With all the consequences above, I am certain that a parenting style which gives too much freedom to their children
is not a good parenting method.
To conclude
, certain parents
teach their children
by granting whatever they ask when raising their children
, I think this
condition will lead them to unsatisfactory circumstances and impact their capacity to be responsible and less dependable in their life
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