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Discuss the advantages and the disdavantages of study abroad

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In recent years,
People
 moving overseas is common .A high percentage of
students
 after their higher secondary prefer to go abroad.The reason is the high facility of learning methods in foreign countries.I believed that these changes have pros and cons.
This
 essay will discuss the positives and negatives of
this
 movement. Let's commence with the positive parts when the
students
 go for their higher studies in the other countries they have to gain the new cultures and they will be strong to do things independently. If the
students
 start to study there ,They automatically learn new thoughts , cultures and how to behave within the group and so on.
Moreover
, they learn new languages ,Learning new languages definitely helps in future and
also
 they will be strong to face any difficult situations nicely and alonely.
For example
,One of my friend's 'sons went to the UK for his graduation.At that time he knows only one language.The
first
 time he separated from his family. After his ,graduation he learned two or three languages fluently.
Thus
 studying abroad has advantages
However
, those have some challenges
also
, As we know that, in any new place,at the
first
 time we are little babies.we don't know which one is right or wrong. If we selected the wrong way,
then
 we will lose everything. Fraud
people
 misuse
people
's life badly.
Furthermore
,The rate of the chance of falling into the wrong path is high .So be careful to choose things properly and wisely.
Secondly
, They don't give any scholarships to other
students
,Because ,that we have complete responsibility for the expenses.
For Instance
,As we know ,If any student goes for higher studies, they take loans from the bank. Sometimes we cannot afford too many expenses. To conclude, the Majority of
people
's ambition is to study other countries. But it has chances and challenges.The Merits are that they learn about new cultures and study stand-alone and
also
 overcome the challenges too.
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