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It's possible to read books on electronic devices called ebook readers. Are ebook readers the best way to read books or should people continue to read books in their paper form?

#books #devices #ebook #readers #people #paper #form
Essay for ebooks In my
opinion
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 the future is in improving people’s lifestyles. There are so many electronics that can make your routine easier. One of these findings
are
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 the ebook
readers
. The ebooks are devices that look like tablets, but not quite. The screen can go darker or lighter and the user can change the colours of the pages and letters, which brings more comfort
for
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to
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 everyone’s eyes. The most comfortable
things
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thing
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 about the
readers
is
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are
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 that they are portable and the book limit is so
hight
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high
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 that you couldn’t even download as
much
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many
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books
. The
books
 are
also
 easier to read because they can get your attention more than the paper ones. As I said in the beginning the
readers
 are the future and I think that it will
also
 be better to be electronic.
This
 way we can reduce
the
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paper waste and help
stopping
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the
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global warming. As an
example
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 you can go
in
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into
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 your living room or your own bedroom and count how many
books
 you have.
Then
 you can think about how many other homes have even more
books
. And
finally
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 you can imagine how so many trees had been cut down
from
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 people to make these
books
. In
conclusion
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 I totally support the ebook
readers
 because they not only make your life so much easier
,
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 but help the planet. And if it helps the planet, it
help
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 us to live on it.
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