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Some people think that secondary school should add international news as a subject; others think that it is a waste of valuable time. Discuss both views.

#people #school #news #waste #time
Despite some people believing that high schools need to include global
news
 as a
subject
 in their curriculum, other folks don't believe that
such
 an approach can benefit the
students
. Both sides have pros and cons.
To begin
 with, nowadays globalization is making the world smaller and information flows all over the planet.
Moreover
, we all need to filter the
news
 to differentiate the fake ones from the real ones, but most importantly to invest our time more wisely in what to read and what we can skip.
For instance
, high schools could start to engage with
students
 to teach them how to be involved in global changes every day and particularly to be able to sort out the everyday
news
 quality-wise.
However
, it is clear why other parts of the society think that
students
 in secondary schools might waste their time understanding specifics of international
news
, as it is still early to get them educated in
this
 difficult
subject
.
Furthermore
, international
news
 is a complex
subject
 one needs really focus on, so it's better to do at universities with relevant study direction.
For example
, it's better to focus on
digital-related
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the digital-related
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subject
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subjects
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 for
students
 which can benefit them in
higher
Correct article usage
a higher
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 amount and prepare
for
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them for
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 their future life
advantures
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adventures
. To sum up, both opinions have full right to coexist in the world, but as the whole educational system is being developed over years it is more likely that we can see international
news
 as a separate
subject
 for
students
 in the secondary academies.
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