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Some people believe that non academic subjects should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate only on academics. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is irrefutable that some masses tend to believe that non-academic courses are not mandatory and should be removed from the syllabus for better performance of the
students
. I agree with the view and the essay will discuss the viewpoint with clarification and suitable examples in the forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with the view that dwellers who consider
students
 should concentrate on just academic subjects into
studies
 and non-academic courses should be removed from the syllabus because they think if
students
 take part in non-academic courses so they cannot be able to concentrate easily on their
studies
 and it will totally affect their level of performance. The
second
 consideration is that giving too much time to non-academic sports, extracurricular activities and competitions all things decrease their time for
studies
 and they would have to face a lot of difficulties in the coming future.
Furthermore
, becoming a successful person is not child's play these days in
this
 competitive world. If
students
 will take a part in non-academic programs so they cannot make true their parents' dreams like what their parents really want to get from them and what they are thinking about their future as well. Apart from ,that there are some considerations that if schools banned non-academic subjects to study so
students
 cannot build themselves by facing day to day life completions and value of curricular activities because non-academic sessions like sports can help them to know about failures and winning which everyone faces these days in each and every field. To epitome, there are both considerations with the statement but academic values are the most imperative part of
studies
 which can facilitate learners to grow and get high paid income jobs in the coming future.
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